A Scandal in Bohemia: I See It

[methylviolet10b]

Author: methylviolet10b
Rating: PG
Character(s): Sherlock Holmes, Dr. John Watson
Summary: Holmes sees many things.
Warnings: Neglible spoilers for SCAN.
Word Count: 60, plus a bonus
Author's Notes: 60 words of my own inspired by one of the canon stories.
Disclaimer: I don't own them.
Additional notes: I'm still extremely sorry I haven't had time to respond to comments or read and comment on fics. I've been up to my eyeballs in work and acd_holmesfest prep, but things should be better now that the fest is upon us.  :-)

SCAN - I See It

The door opened, and he was before me.

Impressions blazed across my mind like fireworks. He looked well. He had gained weight; several pounds. His hair and moustache neatly trimmed. His clothing was brushed, although his boots showed careless scraping.

He was loved, and happy in his newly-married life.

And yet visibly glad to see me. My Watson had returned.

Extended-play version (100 words):

I heard the tread on the stair, but I had imagined Watson’s step so many times that I discounted the evidence of my ears. Then the door opened, and he was before me.

Impressions blazed across my mind like fireworks. He looked well. He had gained weight; several pounds had filled out the sturdiness of his frame. His color was good, his hair and moustache neatly trimmed. His clothing was well-cared-for; pressed, tailored, brushed, although his boots showed careless scraping.

He was loved, and happy in his newly-married life.

And yet visibly glad to see me. My Watson had returned.

Comments

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Aw, lovely description - I'm glad Holmes has his Watson back.

[methylviolet10b]

Me too. That opening, where Watson reflects on how he really hasn't seen much of Holmes since his marriage, is terribly sad in its own way. At least it was when I thought about it from Holmes' point of view.

Thank you!

[debriswoman]

A beautifully described scene:-)

[methylviolet10b]

Thank you!

[spacemutineer.livejournal.com]

I like this very much. Inside your Holmes' head is always such a great place to be, especially when he's deducing, and even more so when he's deducing about his much-missed doctor. And as always, thanks for posting both versions. The sparer 60 is sharp and to the point and then you read the more lush 100 to get the fuller picture. Terrific.

[methylviolet10b]

Thank you! I'm trying to improve my understanding of Holmesian head-space in this round of 60s. I'm glad it's working for you!

And yes, the 60 was painfully brief this week; my original draft was 90 words, so it made sense to do an 'extended play' as well as the actual 60.

60 words for 60 cases, week 9: A Scandal in Bohemia

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[snycock.livejournal.com]

So very sweet! I like how Holmes notes the ways in which marriage agrees with Watson, but also how pleased Watson is to see him again.

[ennui-enigma.livejournal.com]

Nicely done! I like the description of fireworks blazing in his mind!

[methylviolet10b]

Thank you! I was trying to capture both aspects. I'm glad it came through!

[methylviolet10b]

Thanks! I think Holmes must absorb a lot of information at once to do what he does.

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

This is beautifully done - you put us right into his head, and the fireworks blazing is very evocative and immediately engaging.

It's very touching that Holmes is pleased when Watson is happy to see him.

A great piece, this.

[methylviolet10b]

Thank you! I like to think they were both glad to see each other, despite Watson's grumbling in the beginning of SCAN.