A Scandal in Bohemia: A Trifle More

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Title: A Trifle More
Rating: Teen (for setting)
Summary: Holmes to Mary.
Author's Note: Last 60 words of my poly Holmes/Mary/Watson fic, A Trifle More, which is the full-length version of the one published for the Holmes_Minor September prompt. Probably cheating, I know.

Sleep was near, like a client oscillating on the pavement.
“I have neither the character nor society’s permission to tend to him as you do. And he is so conspicuously loved; his person, wardrobe, everything about him says so.”
“I act as any wife.”
“Indeed. I should have thought a little more.” I heard him smile. “Just a trifle more.”

Comments

[debriswoman]

Wistful and warm
Works well:-)

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much!

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Watson is very fortunate.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Yes, but I think he's aware and appreciative.

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

What fool says I'm not wealthy,
With my heart's desires replete?
One true love in Kensington -
And one in Baker Street!

[grrlpup]

Awwww. So nice to see Watson loved and Mary appreciated!

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

There aren't enough poly musicals! I think your refrain would work nicely.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you. Lucky folks all around to have found each other.

[laurose8.livejournal.com]

What a very pleasant 60, and most well written. I love the metaphor in the first line.

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Definitely not cheating ^_^ The 60 words work perfectly as a stand-alone.

Like laurose8, I love that first sentence. And I love the understanding you've given Holmes - that though he loves Watson, he would never have been any good at being his spouse. The understated compliment Holmes gives to Mary at the end is just wonderful.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you. Glad you liked it!

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

All an attempt to turn a catty conversation about marital weight gain into something kinder and more poignant.