The Devil’s Foot: Released

[mafief.livejournal.com]

Canon Story: The Devil’s Foot
Title: Released
Author: Mafief
Rating: G
Warnings: Might be creepy?
Author’s Notes: I realize one of the points about this story is to dispel the believe that the Tregennis family were killed by demonic forces. However, I thought it might be fun(?) to give a supernatural explanation as to how the root could produce something that can kill. It’s written from the perspective of a demon released from the Devil’s Foot root. And I’m slightly creeped out at my brain for coming up with this.


Waiting through the ages,
I came not from this world.

From my home, O man, fire releases me.
I shall partake in my delight!

I am singular in my victim’s experience;
They will forever be changed.

I steal reason and life’s breath from any I embrace.
Come close and I will show you, O man, what it is to fear.

Comments

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Clever. An interesting idea, very well put!

[debriswoman]

Suitably chilling.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

A clever idea to turn the story back on itself and skillfully executed, especially like the final line.

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Echoing Okapi's comment - it is such a great idea to have a supernatural aspect after all, even though there is a murderer and the physical murder weapon of the powder. It would make for a very interesting full length fic I think.

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

Oooh, nice one. Very unique POV.

[mafief.livejournal.com]

Yah... I generally don’t like creepy and this one is bugging me.

[mafief.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

[mafief.livejournal.com]

Thank you. It’s not often I get to writing from a demon’s POV.

[mafief.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :)
I’m very pleased with the last line.

[mafief.livejournal.com]

I was trying to think of something that would cause fear when burned and inhaled and was coming up blank. So why not make it an evil being?
As for full length fic bit, I can either leave it up for adoption or try it myself. I hadn’t considered writing anything more but your comment is causing me to think about it further. I think I know where I could go with it but I’d like your thoughts on it. Can I message you?

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Yes, indeed - do feel free to message me ^_^ I'm very happy for you to bounce ideas off me if you think it's going to help.