A Scandal in Bohemia: Show, Don't Tell

[snycock.livejournal.com]

Canon story: A Scandal in Bohemia
Title: Show, Don't Tell
Author: snycock
Category: Slash
Rating: G

Can you see my heart leap when you enter the room? Can you see my hands shake when I toss you my cigar case? Can you see the despair in my eyes when I look you over and deduce your contentment? Can you see my fingers tremble when I bid you stay?

No. You see but you do not observe.

Comments

[debriswoman]

I can appreciate a neat turn of phrase even if I have never viewed their relationship as heading in this direction:-)

Nice work:-)

[snycock.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)

[wild-huntress.livejournal.com]

Aw, this was sweet and angsty.. Awesome!

[snycock.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I just can't resist the angst. :-)

[ennui-enigma.livejournal.com]

Poor Holmes!

A beautiful little piece of writing :-)

[snycock.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I enjoyed thinking of all the things that Watson wasn't observing that might have been obvious.

[ennui-enigma.livejournal.com]

Great job!

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Poor Holmes. Very sweet.

[snycock.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I was really struck by Watson's description of how Holmes wasn't very effusive when he visited, and it made me wonder what he might have been hiding.

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

I love the parallel of deductions here - great little piece! A nice piney Holmes as well which I enjoy. Watson is busy telling us he's perfectly disdainful of emotion of this sort when in fact he's just perfectly adept at hiding it.

[hisietari.livejournal.com]

Neat! Now, I do wonder though - is there a hidden sense of relief behind these questions? What would change if there was observation?

[spacemutineer.livejournal.com]

As you said, we had similar lines of thought here. So good!