Mrs. Hudson's Poetry Page: The Three Garridebs

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Welcome once again to my poetry page!

I hope each week you will read Dr. Watson’s delightful narrative and then be inspired to write a poem related to it in some way. All forms of poetry are permitted, and further down the page there is a selection you might like to consider using over the coming weeks.

This week my featured form is the Tyburn.

Shadow Poetry gives this definition:

A six line poem consisting of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 syllables.

The first four lines rhyme and are all descriptive words. The last two lines rhyme and incorporate the first, second, third, and fourth lines as the 5th through 8th syllables.


Poetry Magnum Opus gives further information about the form, and also gives some information on the unconnected Tyburn verse, which is… a thematic genre of poetry named for the infamous Tyburn gallows outside of 16th century London where a multitude of political prisoners as well as other condemned felons were hanged. The poetry exploits the many executions there. The frame of the verse is at the discretion of the poet.


The first four lines should be made up of four 2-syllable, descriptive words. I have kept to two syllables per line but I have otherwise played with that rule a little.


Here is my example poem based on Dr. Watson’s Mrs. Hudson had come in with a card upon a tray. I took it up and glanced at it.:



Entrée
With tray
Sashay
Away
No thanks for my entrée with tray then?
Regally, I sashay away. Men!



As always, this is simply something to consider for the future. Any form of poetry is welcome this week—and every week! Here are a few suggestions for you:

221B verselet, abecedarian poetry, acrostic poetry, alexandrine, beeswing, blackout poetry, blues stanza, bref double, Burns stanza, call and response, chastushka, cinquain, circular poetry, clerihew, colour poems, concrete poetry, Cornish verse, curtal sonnet, diamante, doggerel, double dactyl, ekphrasis, elegiac couplet, elegiac stanza, elfje, englyn, epigram, epitaph, epulaeryu, Etheree, fable, found poetry, ghazal, haiku, Italian sonnet, kennings poem, lanturne, limerick, lyric poetry, mathnawī, palindrome poetry, pantoum, Parallelismus Membrorum, poem cycle, quintilla, renga, riddle, rime couée, Schüttelreim, sedoka, septet, sestina, sonnet, tanka, tercet, terza rima, tongue twister poetry, triangular triplet, triolet, Tyburn, villanelle


Please leave all your poems inspired by The Three Garridebs in the comments on this post. I look forward to seeing them!


Warm regards,

Mrs. Hudson

Comments

Limerick

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

A recluse, his surname bizarre,
Is told “Want a fortune? Go far!”
There’s a press unconcealed –
But the great heart, revealed,
Shows where our priorities are.

Re: Limerick

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

For once indeed the truth will out.

Re: Limerick

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Oh, I love 3, 4 and 5 ^_^ And yes - it's that moment, rather than the case that always draws me back to 3GAR.

RE: Limerick

[debriswoman]

Very well put...straight to the heart of the tale.

Re: Limerick

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Nice parallel of the printing press and Holmes's heart. And, if you think about it, the only thing that would lure Garrideb away from his collection is a fortune that would help him 'complete' it. Priorities revealed all around.

Re: A Tyburn: Priceless.

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Ooh, very succinctly put.

Re: A Tyburn: Priceless.

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

That's wonderful ^^" I love how the first two descriptive words contrast with the second two. And your final couplet is perfect.

Re: A Tyburn: Priceless.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Well done!

Re: A Tyburn: Priceless.

[laurose8.livejournal.com]

debriswomanly neat! Thank you.

Re: A Tyburn: Priceless.

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

Oooh, brilliant. That sentence just dropped my jaw the first time I read it.

Re: Written earlier: Holmes

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

So beautiful contrasting Holmes's normal outlook with his 'irrational' response to Watson's injury. Gorgeous.

Re: Written earlier: Holmes

[laurose8.livejournal.com]

Yet another so well written...The last verse is especially strong.

Re: Written earlier: Holmes

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

All romantic sentiment is abhorrent to my faculties, Watson, and furthermore (*bang*) BITCH DO YOU WANT TO DIE?!!

Re: Written earlier: Watson

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

What a lovely comparison of Holmes and Watson's reactions.

Re: Written earlier: Watson

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

I like both poems but I have to say that Watson's was the one I found most moving. It's manages to be heartwarming and heartbreaking. Heartwarming because at last Watson has proof that Holmes cares; heartbreaking because Watson needed to be wounded to see that proof. And also heartbreaking because he might never see that truth again, even if he knows it exists.

Re: Written earlier: Watson

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

A nice companion to the earlier one. Shows how Watson views the injury and the preciousness of the revelation it produced.

Re: Written earlier: Watson

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

Forget "Norbury" as a humbler: When Holmes starts getting really cold and snotty, Watson only need murmur "Garrideb" to subdue his flatmate.

Another of those 'at least it rhymes'

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

What’s in a name?
A fortune, or great wealth
Or not, if this Garrideb
Is really Evans, acting with stealth

Re: Another of those 'at least it rhymes'

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

I notice you didn't attempt to rhyme "Garrideb" :P

Your poem, Mrs H

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

I fear your efforts are too often undervalued, Mrs H.

More gin?

Re: Your poem, Mrs H

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

I am trying to cut down, Mrs. S-H. Lent approaches.

attempt tyburn

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

obtuse
recluse
abuse
mis-use
Slain, gutt'd the obtuse recluse mind
When to the world's abuse, mis-use blind

Re: attempt tyburn

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Crikey - a real feeling of darkness and tragedy to your poem ^^" I love your choice of descriptive words.

Doggerel

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

It quickly clicks
How to use the modern telephone
Reward Holmes’s new tricks
Give the old dog a bone


(I realise I’m on dangerous ground in this comm using that last line (I still remember the “When you’re shooting out a deadbolt with your gun” debacle), but “Dog and bone” is, of course, cockney rhyming slang for “phone”.)

Re: Doggerel

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Unfortunately Mr Holmes seems to think he has to speak loudly enough for his listener to hear without the machine. It is almost worse than the arrival of the boy with the telegram at all hours.