The Retired Colourman: A Blues Song

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Canon Story: The Retired Colourman
Rating: Gen

The retired colourman
thought
missus w’another man
thought
he’d go and bluff a man
but
Mister
Holmes’d be a duller man
than
every cryin’-mother’s man
if
he
wasn’t such a muller man
and
through-a-
winner-bouncin’ rubber man!
And
Mister
Holmes’d
be
a sail-
without-a-rudder man
without
his unlike-
any-other man,
his
band-of-brother man,
Doctor
Watson.
So, it’s bye-bye
Mister Colourman!

Comments

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

A 'blues' song - how appropriate for a colourman ^_^

I really like 'muller man' and 'through-a-/ winner-bouncin’ rubber man!'

And my favourite part is:

Mister/ Holmes’d/ be/ a sail-/ without-a-rudder man/ without/ his unlike-/ any-other man,/ his/ band-of-brother man,/ Doctor/ Watson.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you, thank you!

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Great take on the story.

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

(harmonica solo)

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

twang, twang, twang!

[debriswoman]

Really clever, and such a great rhythm:-)

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Thank you!!