Mrs. Hudson's Poetry Page: The Three Garridebs

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Welcome once again to my poetry page!

I hope each week you will read Dr. Watson’s delightful narrative and then go on to write a poem related to it in some way. All forms of poetry are permitted, and further down the page there is a selection you might like to consider using over the coming weeks.

And here, courtesy of my housemaid Rachel, is this week’s suggested poem to read—a suggestion inspired by the themes and subjects in this week's story. Hopefully you will enjoy the poem, and perhaps it may give you some ideas for a poem of your own or allow you to look at Dr. Watson's story in a new way.



The Kiss

By Kurt Brown


Note from Rachel: It was a declaration of love, perhaps, with only one thing left unconfessed.




Thank you so much to Rachel. And here is also a new poetry form to try: the trine.


Poetry Magnum Opus gives this definition:

The Trine is a verse form which apparently originated in France… Trine is Anglo-French meaning "three each"... The elements of the Trine are:

a poem in 9 lines made up of 3 rhymed couplets followed by a tercet.

isosyllabic, (same syllable count).

rhymed, rhyme scheme a a b b c c a b c.



Here is my example. I have chosen to use 14 syllables per line:


The widow of the gentleman who was born son of Hudde
Now rents out some fine rooms to gentlemen whose names are mud.
First tenant is an army doctor who is Walter’s son.
But unfortunately the horror’s only just begun.
Next tenant is the child of an island’s son or daughter.
(Is that why his sitting room’s under two foot of water?)
So, as I weep bitter tears and start to clear up the flood
Out of all of these facts, I can only find hope in one
They haven’t found a third to destroy my bricks and mortar.


But you do not have to use this form. Any form of poetry is welcome this week—and every week! Here are a few suggestions for you:

221B verselet, abecedarian poetry, acrostic poetry, alexandrine, ballad, barzelletta, beeswing, blackout poetry, blitz poem, blues stanza, bref double, Burns stanza, call and response, chastushka, cinquain, circular poetry, clerihew, colour poems, compound word verse, concrete poetry, Cornish verse, curtal sonnet, débat, décima, diamante, doggerel, double dactyl, echo verse, ekphrasis, elegiac couplet, elegiac stanza, elfje, englyn, epigram, epistle, epitaph, epulaeryu, Etheree, fable, Fib, florette, found poetry, free verse, ghazal, haiku, hay(na)ku, In Memoriam stanza, Italian sonnet, jueju, kennings poem, lanturne, lies, limerick, line messaging, list poem, lyric poetry, mathnawī, micropoetry, mini-monoverse, musette, nonsense verse, palindrome poetry, pantoum, Parallelismus Membrorum, poem cycle, quatern, quintilla, renga, rhyming alliterisen, riddle, rime couée, rispetto, Schüttelreim, sedoka, septet, sestina, shadorma, sonnet, stream of consciousness, tanka, tercet, terza rima, tongue twister poetry, triangular triplet, trine, triolet, Tyburn, villanelle


Please leave all your poems inspired by The Three Garridebs in the comments on this post. I look forward to seeing them!


Warm regards,

Mrs. Hudson

Comments

Clerihew

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

Poor mad Professor Nathan
Unwisely put his faith in
A scheme that conned like P.T. Barnum –
As red-haired Jabez Stone could warn him

Re: Clerihew

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Yep, there were many who could have warned him.

Re: Clerihew

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Yes! He's obviously not a reader of The Strand.

Re: Clerihew

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Very neat idea going for Nathan instead of Garrideb - I do like 'Nathan/faith in' ^^

RE: Clerihew

[debriswoman]

Nicely done:-)

Triune (9 syllables)

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

So poor Watson lost some of his blood
Not enough for it to be a flood
Nathan Garrideb lost his right mind
Through actions which were very unkind
Killer Evans was judged by the law
Shooting his gun from the trapdoor
The second Garrideb was a dud
Pretences for which Holmes was not blind
Though Watson’s leg was bloody and sore

Re: Triune (9 syllables)

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Very nice! I like the blood and flood rhymes. I always forget he was shot in the leg. He could have bled out if the bullet'd nicked the femoral artery, but lucky for us Killer Evans wasn't that good a shot.

Re: Triune (9 syllables)

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

I do like Killer Evans was judged by the law/ Shooting his gun from the trapdoor. Some very nice rhymes in there.

Re: Triune (9 syllables)

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

A very nice summation of that first paragraph - "cost me a bloodletting, cost another man his reason, cost another his freedom."

RE: Triune (9 syllables)

[debriswoman]

Very well done:-)

Trine: Three

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

The first’s a wolf in sheep’s name : a spider spins a web.
Half-Yank, half-Brit, all snake : Mister John Garrideb.
The second’s a mere ruse : of ink and air, he’s made.
Mister H. Garrideb: a lure for tup ne’er-strayed.
The third’s the mark, the ram : the cog in snake-wolf’s wheel.
Poor Nathan Garrideb : the only one that’s real!
The wolf returns to dark : fortune’s land, fortune’s ebb.
Who wasn’t still isn’t : he rests where he was laid.
Poor ram becomes shorn lamb : sans curios and keel.

Re: Trine: Three

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Great use of the verse form for the three Garridebs.

Re: Trine: Three

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

Wonderful imagery and vocabulary ^__^

Few favourite bits:

a wolf in sheep’s name

of ink and air, he’s made.

a lure for tup ne’er-strayed. (I applaud your knowledge of the correct terminology ^^)

The third’s the mark, the ram : the cog in snake-wolf’s wheel./ Poor Nathan Garrideb : the only one that’s real!

Poor ram becomes shorn lamb : sans curios and keel.

Re: Trine: Three

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

And one of the two sheepdogs got a bitten leg for their efforts to protect the flock and take down the wolf.

RE: Trine: Three

[debriswoman]

Excellent portrayal of the Garridebs and beautifully put together:-)

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

I am the very model of a modern Hans Sloane curator.
My curios do show that I am far from any amateur.
I’ve rocks from lochs of note and every era geological,
all classified and sorted in an order that’s most logical
Apart from stones, I’ve bones! So many fossils anatomical!
Of skulls, there’s Heidelberg, of course, Cro-Magnon, and Neanderthal.
For instruments of flint, this cabinet. I’ve got a lot of them.
And coins from ancient mints? That case, right there. It’s chocked full to the brim.
See, my displays’d fetch praise from premier lepidopterologists.
Debris? Dear me! These piles aspire to those of archeologists!
My museum’s small but grand. No dilettante, no, sir, connoisseur.
I am the very model of a modern Hans Sloane curator.

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

Absolutely awesome!

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

*applauds heartily and over-excitedly* ^___^

Marvellous, marvellous rhymes ^__^

My favourites:

I’ve rocks from lochs of note and every era geological,
all classified and sorted in an order that’s most logical
Apart from stones, I’ve bones! So many fossils anatomical!
Of skulls, there’s Heidelberg, of course, Cro-Magnon, and Neanderthal.

See, my displays’d fetch praise from premier lepidopterologists.
Debris? Dear me! These piles aspire to those of archeologists! (With a special mention for 'Debris! Dear me!' ^_^)

[gardnerhill.livejournal.com]

(standing ovation)

[debriswoman]

Absolutely brilliant:-)

Rachel's poem

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Lovely! The kind of poem you could write a fic (or a hundred) about :)

Re: Rachel's poem

[scfrankles.livejournal.com]

I do particularly like this one - so poignant but so beautiful.

Mrs. Hudson's poem

[okapi1895.livejournal.com]

Very Old Testament, Mrs. H. Calls to mind plagues, Noah, and of course, Job.

Re: Mrs. Hudson's poem

[thesmallhobbit.livejournal.com]

I like the idea of plagues ...

RE: Mrs. Hudson's poem

[debriswoman]

Very well done:-)